There are 2 types of video editing for off-road videos. One is the action packed movie trailer style. Then there is the more drawn out story telling technique. I do more of the action packed stuff with very short scenes all full of action and only the best footage makes the cut with clips less than 10 seconds long. Yours is more of a story telling video. I don't think it was bad at all. I actually enjoyed watching it. Only suggestion would be to cut the clips a little bit shorter. I would limit them all to 20 seconds unless someone is telling useful info, or an epic moment. You can always cut the clips between vehicles going up a section. Or if you have only one camera, shoot the vehicle from one side, then move to the other side and continue filming. This makes it look like you are using more than one camera. I can see you were spotting while filming so that makes it much more difficult/impossible to do. Watch a couple xoverland videos for some ideas.